The more involved our readers, the more vivid their reading experience will become—and the better our stories will be. The trick for authors is figuring out how to get out of the reader’s way and let him personify our stories in a way that brings the action and emotion to unforgettable life. In his writing craft book Unless It Moves the Human Heart, Roger Rosenblatt compares this partnership to the one we see every time we go to the movies:
…great movie actors leave the work to the audience. …They just say their pieces and the moviegoers fill in the emotions. A good writer does the same thing. If you have something worthwhile to say and you just say it, plainly and clearly, your reader will add in his or her life and feel it personally. Your reader will think it was you who gave him the depth of feeling that’s unearthed. But all you did was hint at it. It was he who dredged up the great heartbreak, or delirium, or outrage at injustice. You merely created the sparking words.
Have you read a book or watched a movie that connected you to the characters in such a way that you could almost hear their unspoken thoughts? The Bourne trilogy, Black Hawk Down, While You Were Sleeping, Master and Commander: The Far Side of the World, and The Kid are just a handful of movies with the ability to accomplish this for me—and, naturally, they’re all perennial favorites as a result.
1. Speak plainly. Don’t confuse understatement with ambiguity. Readers shouldn’t be left to wonder what you mean. If your character is angry/ecstatic/terrified/guilt-ridden, spell it out.
2. Don’t over-explain. Don’t feel you need to explain every little thought and emotion that pops into your character’s heads. Once you’ve shown the reader what’s going on inside the character’s mind, move on.
3. Don’t under-explain. Internal narrative is our gift to our readers. Unless you’re going for a Hemingway-esque style (which isn’t recommended, unless you’re Hemingway), don’t skimp on internal narrative. Balance—just the right amount, no more, no less—is the key to effective narrative.
4. Rely on unique and evocative action beats. Authors aren’t able to achieve the same nuance of personality and emotion as actors on the screen (saying your character stared moodily or quirked an eyebrow really won’t convey all that much to your reader). But we can utilize physical responses unique to our characters and their situations to help readers see our cast as realistic and unique human beings.
5. Rely on dialogue. The subtext offered by dialogue—subtext that often says something entirely different from the words themselves—gives us a marvelous opportunity for understatement. Ideally, your dialogue should be so crisp and original that readers will have no difficulty hearing the character’s voice and all its many shades of meaning.
6. Show, don’t tell. Finally, this oft-repeated bit of advice bears sharing once more. If you have a choice between saying your character is angry, having him think Oh, I’m so angry, or showing him heaving a raw chicken at someone’s head in a fit of temper—always opt for the latter.
The art of bringing the reader in as a co-writer is ultimately the entire art of fiction. But these few tips will give you a head-start as you seek to deepen your stories and bring your characters to life.